For my writing process this time I did most of the work on my first draft, unlike our rhetorical analysis essay, so when I got to my final there were not many changes I had to make. It was difficult for me to decide on a message because I could find so many in my story but I eventually decided to make it about being honest. I thought my talk with Mrs. Nisbett was helpful when we talked about how I should order my paper with going from present to past to present. I always have trouble staying in the correct tense. I was reluctant to add an introduction paragraph about my message. I sat down for probably an hour writing and rewriting it trying to make it flow and I just did not like it because I thought my conclusion was all the explanation it needed for it to make sense and not be redundant. I did add a few sentences because it was in the requirements although I personally did not want my essay that way. The pier edits were good this time because I was given helpful feedback. It was easier for me to think of metaphors and stuff for other people's papers than my own. It did not feel like people really understood what it meant to show not tell or they did but could not think of how to add it into their narratives. I did think of a few good ones but I wish I could have added more. The one thing I do not like about it is that I feel like other students do not come prepared with their essay and they are unrefined it is hard to give helpful feedback because you know they will probably change the majority of it the night before the final is due.
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1. How can I stay in the right tense
2. How can I make my message more clear 3. Where can I add more sensory imagery I think the author's message is that there does not always have to be a clear path for the future.He talks about how people like patterns and connections but life does not always make sense or stick to the plan for example the tornado changing everything or your mom suddenly passing away. Life changes and people just need to learn to roll with it and work for a better tomorrow. I think the audience is anyone that has been through a life changing experience because they can relate and his message will help them through it. I think that the author is a realist. I like how the author split the story up. It made it easier to read and understand. The story made me feel appreciative for never having been through a natural disaster, especially when he mentioned a classmate who lost his mom.
I’m going to write my personal narrative about the time I was sexually harassed at work. I worked at a skate park and a few other girls and I were getting a lot of unwanted attention from our manager and we brought up the issue to the owner and he got fired.
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